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He always had really bad luck. One of the many downsides to being a monster.
The wolf knew that he didn’t need an excuse to attack the poor deer that drank from the lake, but it made him feel better to give himself one.
“It is the rules of the land to not grace this place during a full moon.” He snarled at the fawn – its spot still covering its back – who was down the lake’s shore just a short distance away. This was a lie; there was no such law, but that did not matter to the wolf.
The fawn’s head snapped up, and the wolf could see the fear in her eyes. The predator did not need to see the fear, however, to know it was there. He could smell it, a heavy scent that clouded the air and clung to his nostrils. He sniffed loudly and his teeth bared, a wolf-version of a smile.
“I did not know.” The fawn stammered, shaking her head. “I am only months old. My mother was shot by hunters when I was even smaller. She didn’t get the chance to tell me about the ways of the woods -“
The young animal was cut off as the wolf drew closer, his paws making low thuds as he came nearer. “Your excuses don’t matter to me,” He told her, the wolfish grin taking up most of his snout.
Before the fawn could even think to run away, too scared to even move an inch, the wolf pounced on the poor animal’s body and brought his teeth down into his prey’s jugular. Blood spattered the ground and muddied the water as it snaked its way to the lake. It gleamed in the full moon’s light, a bright scarlet, and as the wolf fixed his cravings, the human part of his brain couldn’t help but whisper softly, a small and frantic, “Villains always find an excuse for revenge.”
The fawn’s body tasted ever the more bitter as he continued to chew.
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Author's Note: So this week I read The Fables of Aesop by Joseph Jacobs. In my story here, I used the fable of the Wolves. In the story that I used, the wolf is a tyrant that rules the countryside. He uses any excuse to find a meal. He uses the excuse that the lamb, who he is hunting, called him bad names. When the lamb tells him that he wasn't even alive when these names were called, he makes another excuse. This goes on until the wolf believes he has the right to attack the lamb, and he ends up eating him for his dinner. In my version, it might not be too obvious, but the main character (the wolf) is actually a werewolf. This creatures a plot point where his inner wolf and the inner human parts of his brain do not agree with the actions of the other. It makes it interesting, if you were to think about the affects on the human because of the wolf's actions, and vice versa, and what that might do to his persona. I kept the same idea and lesson that is learned in the story, while also leaving the main point of story at the end like Jacobs did. I used more imagery in the story and gave more details than the original story did, to make the writing more complex and the readers intrigued. I had fun writing this story; I like writing the villains as the narrator of stories. It makes for a more interesting read.
Hey there Cassidy!
ReplyDeleteI think you did a really good job with this story. The descriptions are really vivid; I could almost see the poor fawn standing by the lake. He made me think of Bambi with this mom! I also really liked the conflict between the wolf and the man, like you talked about in your author's note. I think it really added depth to the story. It wasn't just a tale with a moral, it had a realistic, rounded character.
Dang, this story was pretty deep! I liked it a lot though. People are very good at justifying why they do the bad things that they do. Some are better at it than others. Human nature in itself is very strange in how we do things and lie to ourselves about why we do them... to protect what? I guess you would call it the ego? So funny how we justify our own actions to ourselves.
ReplyDeleteAll props to you for not turning this story into a happily ever after one! I am so guilty of doing this. What I mean is that I get down to the end of my story, and it just feels soooo unsatisfying from the authors perspective to make the story go awry. I will need to learn soon though, how to suck it up and make the stories more authentic by having dramatic endings. You did so well at that!
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ReplyDeleteThis story was great and, like those above, I think you set the mood from the get-go that allowed for such a dark ending. I love how you made the reader feel almost bad for the wolf as he could not help that he was a monster and felt the need to make an excuse before making his attack. The dialog between the fawn and the wolf truly did make the story.
Also, the fact that this was about a wolf already had me drawn in as that is my topic for my storybook and my last name! Always fun finding little connections like this throughout others' stories.
Thank you so much for sharing!
Hey Cassidy! I really loved this story! I love the thoughts of the human part of him that observes all but doesn't seem to have any say in what is happening. May a way of adding more dialogue from the human could be done by putting it in Italics. That way he could give more commentary without it interrupting the story too much, but it would still be clear for the reader! Such a great job overall!
ReplyDeleteHey, Cassidy! Great description! You packed a lot of description into a small space and it was so good. I really like how you chose to write a werewolf story - it took the source material and gave it a fresh spin. The conflict in the werewolf's mind between his human side and his wolf side was so very well done. Keep up the good work, I will check back for more stories!
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